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First, even though it's on key frames, it needs to be faster. That's an incredibly slow kick. Second, I'm not sure why the character on the bottom left is doing a take (or whatever he's doing), then ducking down. There really isn't time for him to be doing a take. Just have a bit of anticipation going upwards and then duck. Otherwise it's too much action and it distracts from where we should be focusing, which is the tall character kicking. I'm also not sure about the staging. Seeing the back of two characters, and barely being able to see the main character, makes the scene a little difficult to read, and weakens the force of the action.
ahh, those are just my opinions though, and you don't have to change anything if you don't want to. You've got nice arcs and actions established already in your keys.
One of my friends also pointed out the problem with Reese's (the rat) dramatic realisation. The new version is now just a mere head-rise, just as you've suggested, rather than a strong anticipation. I've also had advice in changing Reese's reaction time to sooner, since it appears he ducks too late to avoid the kick.
I agree the staging is a little difficult to read. I've already inbetweened and it seems to read well enough. If I have time, I'll see if I can toy with the positioning and perhaps it could read better.
However, I do appreciate your comments and suggestions and would not ask you to hold back on my account
I used bottom pegs for first and second year, but for this film I've adapted to top peg use.....Can't remember why. I still prefer bottom peg use though.